Tuesday, 30 June 2020

Writing Sample term 2, 2020

Last week we did a writing sample. we had 15 minutes to plan, 30 to write, and 15 to recraft.
 Choose to write mine on a experience that i had at my year six cross  country.


hear is my writing sample.


Year six cross country



The day is finally here. You have been waiting and preparing all year for this moment. Pacing back and forward, you can’t sit still, this is because of all the nerves building in your stomach. Your race is nearing to start and the thoughts on how you are going to do are clouding your mind.

Trying to remember your stretches and drills, you hear the chatter of your fellow classmates and the current race in action. As you are called to the starting line, your gut tenses. The thought of holding your reputation puts pounds of pressure on your shoulders. All you want to do is get the race over and done with, but watching the last of the year six boys hobble past to the finish line makes your patience wear thin. Taking deep breaths to keep calm is all you can do as your ambition to win grows bigger and bigger by the second. Looking over your shoulder you see a line of determined faces ready to race. Butterflies return to your stomach as you try not to get wounded up. The thought of upping your six year reputation to seven is what keeps your determination going.

Suddenly, the crowd noise dims and all your attention is on the next three laps of Waitiata park. To your right, you hear the starter quieting the spectators, then you hear the calls…

“On your marks”….

                        “Get set”…

                                     BANG! The stater block goes and you are off!



this is my marking.


Blue=Miss Willocks score. Purple= my Next Learning Step.

Yellow= My Pick For Planning and Recrafting









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